Thursday, August 11, 2011

Does the beginning of my "book" (story-future book) sound stupid?

As a first chapter it doesn't really grab your attention. It needs something more suspenseful to make the reader not want to put it down. Every story needs some level of suspense so you can't wait to find out what happens, and my best tip is not to tell them too soon. Well written though, obviously you have a lot of talent. Keep up the good work

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